It was dificult for me to find an article that needed improvement. Most of the stories I read were hard news stories written in inverted-pyramid style like the unusual one I mention in the previous blog. One article that I found in The New York Times called "In the Stent Era, Heart Bypasses Get a New Look" could possibly be improved. Overall, I would have to say that the article was well-written. The focus was clear and concise, except for a few occasions in the middle where the author seems to stray. Every time the author begins to stray, though, he ties it back to the main point. The one thing that I might have changed is to take the example of the patient in the latter half of the story and move it closer to the beginning. It could be moved to the very beginning. The story could have been written more in narrative style, instead of beginning with a question. I know Ms. Kopinski frowns on starting a story that way. The question restates the headline. It may be kind of redundant. The story is also on the long side. Many readers might not commit to reading the entire story, but that might just be my laziness speaking. I had to force myself to read it from start to finish. Otherwise, it is a good story.
